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On the vast area of an ocean, there was an island off the coast of the land that neighbored it. This island was not like other islands for it was floating high above the surface of the planet, breaching the sky. On the surface of the island was nothing more than old ruins with a shrine on top of them and a forest surrounding the rest of it. On top of the shrine lied a great power; a power that kept the island afloat and was kept away from those that wish to steal. The island was known as, "Angle Island", it housed the great power and the one who protects it from harm. There, the protector guards it, keeping it safe whenever it is in trouble as to honor his clan which made up the population long ago.


"hmmmm" the creature hummed "It's been to quiet lately, for months the master emerald has gone untouched


He began to walk down the shrine to the ruins


"I haven't heard a word from Sonic and the others in a long time, Eggman's doing god knows what, and rouge…I don't even know"


He crossed his arms and began to think


He was known as Knuckles the Echidna the last of the Echidna clan and the protector of the Master Emerald; the great power for which he protected. He is honest, Independent, short-tempered and is strongly devoted to his duty. He is the type of person to take everything serious and never the person to kid around.

As he walked around the ruins he noticed something, something glowing


"what is that?" he thought


It was under piles of a fallen structure. He used his amazing strength and moved the piles of stone with ease. He had a clear view of what it was but did not know what it is.


" Maybe Tails will know something" he though analyzing it


He started off toward station square hoping Tails would know something




"YAHHHHHHHHH!"


WHACK


"Ow…that…hurt" Rainbow dash said while giving the wall a face high five


"Well at least she lasted long that time" said Bocoe said


"But not long enough" Eggman said while thinking of another idea


Rainbow dash have spent hours in Eggmans' training simulator, He was creating virtual realities for Rainbow to train in. This one was a desert battle against a giant robot worm


"Hey Doc can we take a break, I'm getting hungry" Rainbow said trying to keep her pride for not being worn out


"Yeah find I'll have Bukkun make you something" Eggman replied


"Thanks" she opened open her wings "ah, dangit still sore"


She trotted out of the room with Bukkun giving her some fruit


"Leave you two, I need to think"


"Yes doctor" they both said at the same time


" What am I doing wrong; she has been through 5 different simulations all ending in faluire. I saw her do incredible things in the city, why can't she pass one stinking test he let out a sigh " wait a minute... He started to think back to when they first met"




"Good, but next time you face sonic he will fight you with all his power and hold nothing back…how are you fighting a fast-moving, hyper-active beings before…in fact what have you done that involve you straining yourself"

      
      "Well…" she started to think back at all the time where she relied on others to aid her
      
      "Nothing really, it's usually peaceful I have always got my friends to back me up whenever there is trouble, BUT I still do heroic stuff in Ponyville like rescue people from certain death. But other than that not really, no"
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"Of course, she does have amazing powers but I'm unlocking them all the wrong way...maybe…"


He pushed his intercom button


"Rainbow Dash, report to the training hall. I have a solution"


Rainbow just finished drinking her water


"Oh boy these training…wacha-ma-call-it are intense. There's no way this sonic guy can do this, but I guess that what's is going to make me better than him"


She started going to the training room


"Now to do some experimenting" Eggman said popping his knuckles  


He reached over to another button on the opposite side of the training room control room, and something rose up in front of him, a Chaos Emerald


"Computer transfer the Chaos Emerald into the training simulator and fire up the Dream Seeker"


"Dream seeker?"  Decoe Questioned "I don't remember you constructing something like that"


"Of course not, it's my brand new invention, I made this to have the ability to see into the minds of others and learn what I can from their past experience, but with the power of the Chaos Emerald and it being hooked up to the training simulator, I will have Rainbow Dash fight someone she has already defeated so that I will know how she can become stronger. I made this because of a past failure I had, but that matters not. Now we test it"


He started to develop a grin


"Computer, begin start up of Dream Seeker. DECOE, BOCOE transfer the Chaos Emeralds' power to the Dream Seeker, BOKKUN hook the Dream Seeker up to the Training rooms' power source.NOW!"


"YES SIR" all three of them replied


Sounds of power erupted in the two rooms


"uhhhh Dr. what's going on?" Rainbow Dash said wondering


"Nothing my dear, but be prepared to have a déjà moment" he replied with a chuckle


The room started to flash different colors and different backgrounds start to change from oceans, to forest, to cities, and she was even on the moon.


"I think I'm gonna be sick" Rainbow dash said wobbly back and forth


Suddenly a giant sphere lowered into the room. The training rooms' background kept changing but the sphere remained.


sevearl minutes passed


"NOW" he screamed


Eggman slammed on the on switch with his fist


The sphere lit up like a disco ball and was analyzing Rainbow Dash


She was to dizzy to noticed


"DREAM SEEKER ACTIVATE"


There was a bright light emitting from the Dream Seeker and it started to get brighter and brighter until no one could see


"YES!...YES!" Eggman said raising his fist



Then there was silence


Rainbow Dash was unconscious. She was lying in the on top of a grassy hill with mountains in the distance a river nearby and a town just down the hill


"uhhhh" Rainbow groaned "oh my head. I still don't see how this is going to make me stronger. Where am I"


She looked at her surroundings


"Wait a minute, is that…PONYVILLE! I'm home, whooo hoooo"


She started to fly over town and through the clouds


"Oh man it feels good to be home,"


She was embracing the feeling of being somewhere she belongs


She glanced down at Ponyville and noticed that there wasn't anyone there


"huh?" she wondered


She landed next to a tree that had been hollowed out to form a library


"Where is everypony? Hello?...is anyone here"


No reply


"Pinkie?...Applejack?"


She started walking


"TWILIGHT!, RARITY!"


She flew up


"WHERE IS EVERYPONY"


She bowed her head She realized what happen


"I'm too late"


Seeing as in no one is around, I tear left here eye


She started walking to Fluttershys' cottage


She arrived moments later still bowing her head


"Rainbow…"


Her head shot up


"Fluttershy?... You there"


"Rainbow dash it is you"


From the cottage a yellow Pegasus walked out, she had a pink mane with three butterflies on her flank


"Fluttershy…you're alive"


They both gave each other a hug


"I'm so glad to see you"


"I'm glad to see you too, Rainbow wh-where did you go"


"I dunno, I was teleported somewhere that I still don't understand"


"I'm glad to see you're ok…i…*sniff*can't say the same about the others"


"What happen here?"


"I…Can't remember. I'm so sorry, but all I can remember is waking up at my home after the fight"


"dangit I should have been here, I could've helped"


"Yeah you should've" Fluttershy snaped


The response froze Rainbow Dash


"You left us here to fend for ourselves; we could not have won without you but NOOOOoooo you had to play the hero again and rush in without thinking and look where that got you,huh, in another world while we all stayed her fighting for our lives. Why can't you think of anyone but yourself Rainbow Dash? Tell me why"


Clouds started to form


"I'm sorry Fluttershy"


"Oh no you're not, not yet"


The wind started to pick up blowing rapidly


Fluttershys' eyes started turning red and yellow with the pupils being different sizes


"This…this doesn't make any sense" Rainbow dash said trying not to freak out


"Make sense?" Fluttershy said in her normal voice


She said in a deeper voice" What's the fun in making sense"


"…No" Rainbow dash with fear in her voice


"Oh yes" she said


A mist covered Fluttershy


Rainbow prepared herself for she knew who it was


The mist faded and the being there was not Fluttershy…but Discord


Rainbows' eyes winded


For she knew she was in for a fight…















"…HEY WRITER!" Discord yelled to the Writer

"What?" I said

"You've given everyone here a description why can't I get one"

"Because I need to get this story done so I can play Team Fortress 2"

"Your buddies on steam can wait. If you're going to use me in your fan-fic you need to give me a proper introduction"

"What if I don't?"

then I going to mess up ur words. u mad bro?

"Find, find…I hate trolls"

"That's much better"

Rainbow Dash has no idea what is going on

"Well then she can go screw herself, now make with the introduction"

"In The Return of Harmony Part 1 and Part 2, Discord is shown to be a mischievous, manipulative trickster with little to no consideration towards his victims, who uses powerful magic, illusions, and hypnotism. He has a sense of showmanship and drama, preferring to be playful towards his victims before getting down to business, even mocking and bantering with Celestia and the six main ponies in Canterlot Tower. He is seen laughing at the expense of others and often manipulates the laws of reality for the sake of his own amusement, often at the cost of others. Among other things, Discord reverses the ponies' behavior, making Twilight Sparkle miserable and depressed, and generally causing ridiculous and horrific things to happen."

"You copying and pasting SoB"

"Hey you got your interdiction no shut up and get ready to fight in the next chapter…"

"You know you should really name them"

"Shut up I know what I'm doing"

"Whatever"
at long last here you go

if you people know me anof this is way a hate trolls

If you have any thoughts on how this could be better or just want to give an idea feel free to speak your peace

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Soniclink137 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
Was the fourth wall breaking at the end really necessary?
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xgamerx01 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
that was just a joke, i didn't won't people to get bored so i said what the hell and just went with it

how was everything else because i can tell you didn't like it
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Soniclink137 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
Did I say I didn't like it? No, I believe I asked if it was necessary. To me, all fourth wall breaking ends up with me facepalming.

As for the rest of it, it was ok. I’m glad you made it a point to point out Dash’s lack of fighting skills because Equestria is so peaceful.

Oh, and in future chapters I would recommend reading it after your done typing it to make sure you don’t make too many mistakes. I found a few errors here and there.
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xgamerx01 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You didn't say it but i could tell...no it wasn't necessary but like i said, it was a "what the hell" moment.

I'm think of submitting it to a discord group, just this one chapter.

Thank you

I spent 6 hours in a row on this...i went through three different look-overs editing it everytime, idk what else to do
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Soniclink137 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
Ah, whatever. I guess we all have to break the fourth wall at some point in time or another.

I could show you some of the mistakes I found if you think that'll help.
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xgamerx01 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it was just a one time thing

that could help
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Soniclink137 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
Well here's what I found:

"There, the protector gauds it..." I think you meant to say guards it.

"But not long anof" Enough would be preferred there

"Hey you got your interdiction no shut up and get ready to fight in the next chapter…" I think Discord wants an introduction, not an interdiction. And now instead of no.

And you forgot to capatalize Tails twice during Knuckles part and Sonic once when Dash was thinking.
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xgamerx01 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks

FUCK YOU SPELLING CHECK, YOU GAVE ME THE WRONG ONE

ok for a while i kept thinking what was the word for it, because i'm absent minded and i tend to forget the simplest things

i questioned the spelling check several times but the spelling check kept leading me back to that word

:icongoddamnitplz:

well i'm off to make the changes
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SonicSlasher12 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
Yo I did 4th wall breaking too in my story
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